Thursday, February 4, 2016

Liberty vs. Security Summary Response

Ben Franklin, in 1759, declares how a person who gives up freedom and liberty for temporary safety deserves neither. Giving up some freedom is the equivalent to giving up all freedom and safety.
Ben Franklin correctly portrays how our freedom is more important than any temporary safety because the government will continue to take more and more of people’s freedom. When one gives up their rights it leads to absolute government control. Once the government gains power in one area, they continue to expand their power, which inevitably limits freedom and takes away rights. When one allows any of their rights to be sacrificed, even if for temporary safety, all of their rights are at risk. For example, the government has the ability to listen in on every person’s phone calls. Edward Snowden warned America about the NSA listening in on its citizens phone calls, so Andrew P. Anapolitano responded with, “The allegations he unleashed are that Americans have a government that assaults our personal freedoms, operates in secrecy and violates the Constitution and the values upon which it is based” (Anapolitano, 2013). The government having the capability to listen in on every person’s phone calls is unconstitutional and violates the privacy of its citizens. The government will stop at nothing to achieve complete power and the minute its citizen’s give up any freedom, the government will gain absolute control. However, humans are flawed and when there are no laws to restrict one’s actions, there is no limit to what somebody could do to harm another person. People need limited rights to be taken away in order to ensure the safety of others. Without safety precautions everyone’s life would be in jeopardy and in order to have security, people must sacrifice some freedom. When discussing the dilemma of the balance between freedom and security, Anapolitano insists, “...you have heard the argument that we all need to sacrifice some liberty in order to assure some safety, that liberty and safety are in equipoise, and when they clash, it is the government that should balance one against the other and decide which shall prevail” (Anapolitano, 2013). The only way government can keep its citizens safe is if the citizens are willing to sacrifice a few freedoms. In order to find the perfect balance between freedom and security is if the people are willing to surrender and trust the government and acknowledge liberty and safety co existent. Many think that safety is more important than liberty and they should be willing to sacrifice their freedom for security. These conclusions seem compelling because many people live in fear for their lives and when a country goes through a tragic and fearful time, such as 9/11, one may be willing to give up some freedom for temporary safety and security. However, one may not understand once any freedom is sacrificed, they will never be able to gain it back. When referring to the Enlightenment prior to the French Revolution, Jean-Jacques Rousseau,a philosopher and writer, explains,  "Free people, remember this maxim:we may acquire liberty, but it is never recovered once it is lost” (Rousseau, 1750). The government will not stop pressuring more freedom and rights to be sacrificed. Giving up freedom for security will only give the government more power to invade people’s privacy. Ultimately, according to Ben Franklin’s quote claiming a person who gives up freedom and liberty for temporary safety deserves neither clearly demonstrates complete freedom is more important than temporary safety.

Tuesday, October 13, 2015

Summary Response Outline Act 5 Kayla Lampe Redo


Summary: no opinion (no “I think”); no personal words (I, You, Me, My, Us, We, Our, Your)
Othello, by Shakespeare, reveals to the reader the only repercussion from obtaining revenge is destruction. Iago makes advances in his plans to destroy the lives of others. He deceives Roderigo and convinces him to attempt to murder Cassio. He also persuades Othello to finally follow through with killing Desdemona, whom he finds meaning and purpose in his life. After all the bloodshed comes to fruition, Iago does not become lieutenant, the very thing that motivates his revenge towards Othello and Cassio. Act 5 of Shakespeare’s play, Othello, affirms to the audience that revenge brings no satisfaction to one’s life and destruction is the only possible outcome.
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas (no quotes)
  • Explanation of ideas
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
  • Concise/Short
  • Contribute ideas back to author
  • no plot
  • In your own words


Response:
  • Topic sentence: Title/Author/Agree Disagree/ Main Idea
Othello, written by Shakespeare, correctly portrays how revenge brings nothing but annihilation to one’s life.
  • Correctly/Incorrectly portrays
  • Make an argument
  • Claim 1:
Iago craves revenge and won’t let anyone or anything get in the way of him attaining his goal. Iago knows he has gained unworthy trust with Roderigo and Othello and will use that trust as a tool for manipulation. Iago desires Othello’s life to be wrecked because Othello did not promote him to lieutenant. Iago tells Othello that Desdemona has been unfaithful to him and she deserves to be punished through death. Othello perceives Iago to be an honest and loyal friend, so he believes every word of Iago’s deceptions. Othello accuses Desdemona of being unfaithful with Cassio. Desdemona denies she was ever unfaithful, but Othello does not believe her, “O perjured woman, thou dost stone my heart, And mak’st me call what I intend to do A murder, which I thought a sacrifice!” (Shakespeare 5.1.71-73) and “It is too late. (he smothers her),” (Shakespeare 5.1.95). Othello believes killing Desdemona is not murder, but a sacrifice. Once Desdemona pleads her case she never gave the handkerchief to Cassio, Othello feels some guilt and admits his reluctance to her. Othello chooses to believe Iago over his own wife. He ends up killing the very thing he lives for and the one person who truly loves him. Iago’s plans for revenge result in destruction in Othello’s and Desdemona’s life.

  • Gives context to the quote
    • Evidence: Quote
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 1(address the opposing viewpoint in order to make my point stronger): However, ....
Iago determines to destroy Othello’s life, and though this brought turmoil for Othello, Iago may have received satisfaction watching Othello’s life fall apart. Losing Desdemona would cause more despair in Othello’s life than any other event, so Iago made sure it happened. Othello has made the decision to murder Desdemona, yet even so he says, “Yet I’ll not shed her blood, Nor scar that whiter skin of hers than snow And smooth as monumental alabaster,” (Shakespeare 5.2.3-5). Desdemona still controls a large part of Othello’s life even after he believes she has wronged him. He still loves her deep down inside and doesn’t want to feel the need to kill her. Othello makes the decision to kill her without injuring her outer body because she is too beautiful to shed blood or be scarred. It is evident Othello is in pain and turmoil; that was exactly Iago’s intentions. Iago achieves his goal and this may bring satisfaction to his life, though it be evil. There may be some satisfaction attained through seeking revenge.

    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation
    • to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Act 5 of the play, Othello, written by Shakespeare, shows the reader that no satisfaction comes from seeking revenge.



Proposal Paper
Rebuttal progression:


1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose…


At first glance, one could think that satisfaction is achieved after Iago gains revenge.


2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]


This position may seem reasonable because Iago succeeded in making Othello’s life miserable through manipulating him to end Desdemona’s life.


3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer...


However, Iago didn’t attain the very thing that motivated his revenge. His reason for revenge was because Cassio was lieutenant when Iago felt he deserved the position more. After all the drama that took place in Cyprus, Cassio was raised to an even higher position because Othello was charged for murder. The little satisfaction Iago may have felt when Othello was in misery could have only lasted a short time until he remembered the reason he craved revenge so fervently. The consequences of Iago’s plan for revenge were the death of both Desdemona and Roderigo. Also, Othello’s life was devastated because he lost his title and would forevermore have to deal with the guilt of knowing he had killed Desdemona. All of these acts of destruction occurred as a result of Iago’s quest for revenge. Annihilation is the only result of wanting revenge.





Tuesday, October 6, 2015

Summary Response Outline Redo Act 2 Othello Kayla Lampe


Summary: No opinion- stick to the facts. No personal words (I, you, we, my, me, our, us, your)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
  • Explanation of ideas
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Othello by William Shakespeare portrays how manipulative people can be. Iago finds weakness in people and uses this to manipulate them. Iago controls Roderigo when he convinces him he is able to persuade Desdemona to fall in love with him. In Act 2 of Shakespeare’s Othello, Iago uses people for his own benefit to help seek revenge against those people who have done him wrong.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Act 2 of Othello, by Shakespeare, correctly  portrays how Iago manipulates his friends in order to get what he wants because he uses Roderigo’s love for Desdemona to get Roderigo to do things against his better nature.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
Ever since that night in Venice, Iago has controlled Roderigo through his dying love for Desdemona. Iago tells Roderigo that Desdemona is in love with Cassio, in order to destroy Cassio’s position as lieutenant, ”First, I must tell thee this: Desdemona is directly in love with him,” (Shakespeare 2.1.239-240).
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation”
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
Iago tricks Roderigo into thinking that Desdemona is in love with Cassio. Iago then convinces Roderigo to go after Cassio when he is drunk. Cassio is intoxicated, and when he is provoked by Roderigo, the two begin to fight. This escalates and Cassio almost kills a man. After this humiliation, Othello strips Cassio of his lieutenancy. Iago is manipulating all of these people with the words he speaks.


  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
when Iago offers ideas to Roderigo on how to win over Desdemona’s heart, he is simply giving helpful advice to a friend. It is not Iago’s choice on whether or not Roderigo follows through with the advice Iago gives him.  
    • After Iago tells Roderigo that Cassio and Desdemona are in love with each other he tries to convince him to provoke Cassio’s anger. Iago gives Roderigo the his advice, “Sir, he’s rash and very sudden in choler, and haply may strike at you. Provoke him that he may” (Shakespeare 2.1.294-295). Although Iago attempted to convince Roderigo to make Cassio angry, it was ultimately Roderigo’s choice whether or not to let his anger control his decisions. Iago did not force Roderigo physically to follow through with fighting Cassio. Iago is only giving Roderigo innocent advice and is in no blame for the fight between Roderigo and Cassio.
    • Evidence: Lead in,   “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
Many think that Iago is not manipulating Roderigo, for Roderigo is doing all of his actions voluntarily.We cannot deny that Roderigo isn’t being forced by Iago to commit these actions. However, Iago is filling Roderigo’s mind with lies and deception. Even though it was Roderigo that fought Cassio, Iago planted an idea of hatred in Roderigo’s mind and Iago told Roderigo to fight Cassio. Iago also got Cassio drunk in order to destroy his sense of right and wrong. Roderigo is simply acting out of jealousy and hatred when he attacked Cassio. Those ideas were planted by Iago. Iago knows not to publicly show his despise for Othello and Cassio so he uses Roderigo as the front man to take all the hits. When Roderigo doubts one of Iago’s ideas, Iago simply tells him more lies to anger him. Roderigo attacked Cassio out of jealousy because he believes that Desdemona is in love with Cassio, an idea imbedded in his head by the one and only manipulative Iago.


  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
In Othello, written by Shakespeare, Iago uses people to get revenge upon Othello and Cassio, and manipulates them into believing lies, and allows them to take the fall for actions that are really Iago’s.



Sample  Outline for “ Cask of Amontillado”
Summary:
  • Topic sentence: Edgar Allen Poe’s “The Cask of Amontillado” presents the power of revenge in ruling peoples’ choices and lives.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas: From the simple beginnings of Fortunato dismissing Luchesi as a connoisseur of fine wine, to Montresor destroying the life of Fortunato for untold injuries, Poe demonstrates how revenge grips the lives of his characters.


Response:
  • Topic sentence:  In Edgar Allen Poe’s “The Cask of Amontillado”, Fortunato does not deserve to be the victim of Montresor’s wrath, because Montresor is deceitful through his words and actions.
  • Claim 1: Montresor’s words are laced with lies
    • Set-up From the beginning of the story, Montresor intentionally, misleadingly compliments Fortunato in order to convince him to go into the catacombs with him. His manipulation of words make it seem as though he is a friend to Fortunato, but ultimately, he lies to get him to do what he wants.
    • Evidence: Lead-in While he is leading him down the vault, Montresor insists that they turn back in order to falsely seem like he cares about his supposed friend,My friend, no. It is not the engagement, but the severe cold with which I perceive you are afflicted.  The vaults are insufferably damp. They are encrusted with nitre” ( Poe 1-2 ).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim  When Montresor says “my friend,”  the reader knows that he is blatantly lying because his intent is to bury him alive and the words he uses sound friendly and filled with worry and concern for his friend.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, .... Although the words Montresor uses seem to be lies, one might consider he is feeling guilty for his intended plan and is trying to back out.
    • Set-up As Montresor and Fortunato descend farther and farther into the catacombs, one might wonder if Montressor is trying to back out of his planned vengeance,
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “Come...we will go back; your health is precious. You are rich, respected, admired, beloved; you are as happy as once I was. You are a man to be missed. For me it is no matter. We will go back; you will be ill and I cannot be responsible” ( Poe 5 ).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: Montressor is trying to give Fortunato the opportunity to escape his fate.  Montressor is realizing the weight of his words upon the future of Fortunato and trying to find a way to reverse the outcome when he speaks of not being responsible.
  • Claim 2: Montresor's actions are not to be trusted.
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Rebuttal progression
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea



Summaries should include:
Only third person views
supporting ideas
~no quotes
facts; no opinions
strong verbs
attribute the ideas back to the author
explain ideas
concise
no plot
in your own words


Response:
Make an argument
take a position; correctly or incorrectly portrays


Proposal Paper
Rebuttal progression:


1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose…


Many think that Iago is not manipulating Roderigo, for Roderigo is doing all of his actions voluntarily.


2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]


We cannot deny that Roderigo isn’t being forced, through words, by Iago to commit these actions.



3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer…

However, Iago fills Roderigo’s mind with lies and deception. Even though it was Roderigo that fought Cassio, Iago planted an idea of hatred in Roderigo’s mind and Iago told Roderigo to fight Cassio. Iago also got Cassio drunk in order to destroy his sense of right and wrong. Roderigo is simply acting out of jealousy and hatred when he attacked Cassio. Those ideas were planted by Iago. Iago knows not to publicly show his despise for Othello and Cassio so he uses Roderigo as the front man to take all the hits. When Roderigo doubts one of Iago’s ideas, Iago simply tells him more lies to anger him. Roderigo attacked Cassio out of jealousy because he believes that Desdemona is in love with Cassio, an idea imbedded in his head by the one and only manipulative Roderigo. Iago’s manipulation is the root cause for all of the destruction taking place between Roderigo and Cassio.

Redo x3 Summary Response Outline Bully
By: Kayla Lampe




  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • The movie Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, sheds light on how bullying affects one’s life.
  • According to the movie, people commit, or attempt suicide because they felt as though they could no longer live through the relentless physical and emotional bullying. The movie shows how bullying can cause mental problems, such as self doubt.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Lee Hirsch’s Bully depicts how bullying can influence one’s decisions in life .
  • Only third person
  • Supporting ideas
    • no quotes
  • facts; no opinions
  • Explain ideas
  • Concise
  • Attribute ideas back to author
  • No plot
  • In your own words




Response:
  • Make an argument
  • take a position (correctly or incorrectly portrays)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully directed by Lee Hirsch correctly depicts how bullying may hinder one’s life because it can lead to suicide.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • As the film proceeds, many different stories are told of how suicide affects someone. One student, Ty, was eleven years old when he was pushed so far he chose to end his own life. Ty was bullied to the point where he felt he did not deserve to live any longer.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Another boy, Alex, was interviewed in the film and stated, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Alex told this to his mom because he had been bullied for so long, he felt immune to the bullying. Alex has been hurt so much that he chooses to not feel anything rather than to feel the hurt. Alex’s life was affected through bullying because he chose to lose the gift of emotion as a result to the bullying he received at school. If this continues he could likely end up committing suicide, too.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
    • Set-up
      • However, not all people that are bullied commit suicide. Parents report bullying to principals, school boards, and teachers in a hope to put an end to it, but they are told that bullying is just another thing that happens and is a part of every child’s life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Kelby is a teenager who gets bullied for being gay. When her dad was talking about how the staff at school respond to the bullying, he made the comment, “They all put on that plastic smile and say, ‘I will see what I can do’,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s parents confronted the school principal while the principal acted like everything was okay and no harm was being done. Many people will say they will take care of the bullying issue just to get parents off their backs, but they have no intention of fixing the problem. Kelby’s dad feels like the principal does not actually want to help him and does not want to confront problems in their school. Instead of Kelby choosing to end her life, she chose to move to a larger city and start going to a new school with hopes of no more bullying in this new city.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?(Rebuttal)
    • Some people, such as fearful adults, would claim that bullying is just another thing that happens, and that it doesn’t do major damage. This position seems reasonable because someone might not attempt suicide because of mental and physical damage based on how they handle being bullied, but it’s more complicated than that. Everyone who is a victim of bullying will be damaged in some shape, way, or form. Often, students do not communicate their feelings and express their emotions through self-harm and suicide. Even when a kid does not physically show their pain, they are hurt on the inside. People need love to thrive and when they do not receive love they are bound to be hurt. Alex was a boy who was bullied in the film and he said, “I’m starting to think I don’t feel anything anymore” (Hirsch). His emotions have been toyed with and he would prefer to lose all emotion than to feel the hurt that these kids cause him to have. Tyler’s a clear example that when people are bullied they have higher risk of committing suicide.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Overall, the film Bully showed us that self-harm is a common result to bullying and one’s life is often damaged when bullying takes place.