Tuesday, September 22, 2015

Redo x2 Summary Response Outline Bully
By: Kayla Lampe



  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • The movie Bully, directed by Lee Hirsch, sheds light on how bullying affects one’s life.
  • According to the movie, people commit, or attempt suicide because they felt as though they could no longer live through the relentless physical and emotional bullying. The movie shows how bullying can cause mental problems, such as self doubt.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Lee Hirsch clearly depicts how bullying can influence one’s decisions in life .
  • Only third person
  • Supporting ideas
    • no quotes
  • facts; no opinions
  • Explain ideas
  • Concise
  • Attribute ideas back to author
  • No plot
  • In your own words



Response:
  • Make an argument
  • take a position (correctly or incorrectly portrays)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully directed by Lee Hirsch correctly depicts how bullying may hinder one’s life because it can lead to suicide.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • As the film proceeds, many different stories are told of how suicide affects someone. One student, Ty, was eleven years old when he was pushed so far he chose to end his own life. Ty was bullied to the point where he felt he did not deserve to live any longer.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Another boy, Alex, was interviewed in the film and stated, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Alex told this to his mom because he had been bullied for so long, he felt immune to the bullying. If this continues he could likely end up committing suicide, too.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
    • Set-up
      • However, not all people that are bullied commit suicide. Parents report bullying to principals, school boards, and teachers in a hope to put an end to it, but they are told that bullying is just another thing that happens and is a part of every child’s life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Kelby is a teenager who gets bullied for being gay.When her dad was talking about how the staff at school respond to the bullying, he made the comment, “They all put on that plastic smile and say, ‘I will see what I can do’,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s parents confronted the school principal and the principal acted like everything was okay and no harm was being done. Many people will say they will take care of it just to get you off their back, but they have no intention of fixing the problem. Instead of Kelby choosing to end her life, she chose to move to a larger city and start going to a new school with hopes of no more bullying in this new city.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?(Rebuttal)
    • Some people, such as fearful adults, would claim that bullying is just another thing that happens, and that it doesn’t do major damage. This position seems reasonable because someone might not attempt suicide because of mental and physical damage based on how they handle being bullied, but it’s more complicated than that. Everyone who is a victim of bullying will be damaged in some shape, way, or form. Often, students do not communicate their feelings and express their emotions through self-harm and suicide. Even when a kid does not physically show their pain, they are hurt on the inside. People need love to thrive and when they do not receive love they are bound to be hurt. Alex was a boy who was bullied in the film and he said, “I’m starting to think I don’t feel anything anymore” (Hirsch). His emotions have been toyed with and he would prefer to lose all emotion than to feel the hurt that these kids cause him to have. Tyler’s a clear example that when people are bullied they have higher risk of committing suicide.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Overall, the film Bully showed us that self-harm is a common result to bullying and one’s life is often damaged when bullying takes place.



Summary Response Outline
Kayla Lampe Redo Othello Act 1


Summary: No opinion- stick to the facts. No personal words (I, you, we, my, me, our, us, your)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
Othello, by William Shakespeare, demonstrates how jealousy can rules one’s life.
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
Iago became fueled with jealousy when Othello chose Cassio to be his lieutenant and not him.
  • Explanation of ideas
Due to this envy, Iago plots to seek revenge on Othello’s betrayal.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Shakespeare clearly illustrates how envy can cause friends to turn on each other.
Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Othello, by William Shakespeare, correctly portrays how jealousy can rules one’s actions because Iago chose to get revenge over keeping a friendship with Othello.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up In Venice, Italy, the noble general Othello has chosen Michael Cassio as his lieutenant instead of Iago.
    • Evidence: Lead in  “ quotation”
Iago complains to Roderigo that he is a much more qualified lieutenant than Cassio could ever be. Iago explains his reasoning to Roderigo when he says,”And what is he? Forsooth, a great arithmetician, one Michael Cassio, a Florentine, A fellow almost damned in a fair wife, that never set a squadron in the field, nor the division of a battle knows more than a spinster,”(Shakespeare 1.1.19-25).  
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
Cassio is a arithmetician from Florence, which leads Iago to believe Cassio can’t fulfill the duty of the lieutenancy. Cassio has never been in battle before, and doesn’t compare to  Iago’s experience and knowledge in the field. Iago feels superior to Cassio, and is confident in the fact that he would excell greater in the lieutenant position than Cassio ever could. Due to this jealousy, Iago decides to go after Othello because he believes that Othello betrayed him by picking Cassio as his lieutenant. Iago manipulates Rodrigo into helping him destroy Othello and Desdemona’s marriage, and destroy Othello.
  • Counterclaim 1:
    • Set-up: However, Iago doesn’t only care about getting revenge.
    • Evidence: After Roderigo realizes he has lost Desdemona, he proclaims, “I will incontinently drown myself” (Shakespeare 1.3 347).


    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
After Roderigo confessed this to Iago, Iago convinces Roderigo that there are still reasons to live. Iago explains to Roderigo that Desdemona will get bored with Othello and leave him. When this happens Roderigo must be ready, with money, to take her hand in marriage. Roderigo has a change of heart and decides there are still reasons for him to live.
  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
A common view is that Iago wouldn’t betray Othello because of their friendship. This position seems reasonable because Iago acts friendly towards Othello. However this is all an act. When Iago is talking to Roderigo early on he says, “I am not what I am” (Shakespeare 1.1 .71). This means that he is two faced and his actions contradict the way he feels. When Iago is with Othello, he appears to be a friend, but when Iago is with Roderigo, he appears to be a hateful, jealous man who despises Othello. Iago even admits to himself, “I hate the Moor” (Shakespeare 1.3.429). Othello still trusts Iago due to the fact that he believes they are friends. Iago uses this trust to manipulate Othello and leads him to believe false information. When Iago convinces Roderigo to not drown himself, this is not out of love or compassion. Iago knows that he will need Roderigo’s aid later on in his path for revenge, so he needs Roderigo to be alive.



  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Iago shows how his jealousy controls his actions when he continues to betray his friend Othello and Roderigo, just to seek revenge for not receiving the lieutenancy.



Friday, September 18, 2015

Summary Response Outline Act 2 Othello Ryley Tennant and Kayla Lampe


Summary: No opinion- stick to the facts. No personal words (I, you, we, my, me, our, us, your)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
  • Explanation of ideas
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
“Othello” by William Shakespeare portrays how manipulative people can be. Iago finds weakness in people and uses this to manipulate them. Iago uses people for his own benefit to help seek revenge against those people who have done him wrong.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
Shakespeare correctly  portrays how Iago manipulates his friends in order to get what he wants because he uses Roderigo’s love for Desdemona to get Roderigo to do things against his better nature.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
Ever since that night in Venice, Iago has controlled Roderigo through his dying love for Desdemona. Iago tells Roderigo that Desdemona is in love with Cassio, in order to destroy Cassio’s position as lieutenant,” First, I must tell thee this: Desdemona is directly in love with him” (Shakespeare 2.1.239-240).
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation”
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
Iago tricks Roderigo into thinking that Desdemona is in love with Cassio. Iago then convinces Roderigo to go after Cassio when he is drunk. Cassio is intoxicated, and when he is provoked by Roderigo, the two begin to fight. This escalates and Cassio almost kills a man. After this humiliation, Othello strips Cassio of his lieutenancy.


  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
when Iago offers ideas to Roderigo on how to win over Desdemona’s heart, he is simply giving helpful advice to a friend. It is not Iago’s choice on whether or not Roderigo follows through with the advice Iago gives him.  
    • After Iago tells Roderigo that Cassio and Desdemona are in love with each other he tries to convince him to provoke Cassio’s anger. “Sir, he’s rash and very sudden in choler, and haply may strike at you. Provoke him that he may” (Shakespeare 2.1.294-295). Although Iago attempted to convince Roderigo to make Cassio angry, it was ultimately Roderigo’s choice whether or not to let his anger control his decisions.
    • Evidence: Lead in,   “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • Claim 2:
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
  • Counterclaim 2: Although, ....
    • Set-up
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?
Many think that Iago is not manipulating Roderigo, for Roderigo is doing all of his actions voluntarily.We cannot deny that Roderigo isn’t being forced by Iago to commit these actions. However, Iago is filling Roderigo’s mind with lies and deception. Even though it was Roderigo that fought Cassio, Iago planted an idea of hatred in Roderigo’s mind and Iago told Roderigo to fight Cassio. Iago also got Cassio drunk in order to destroy his sense of right and wrong. Roderigo is simply acting out of jealousy and hatred when he attacked Cassio. Those ideas were planted by Iago. Iago knows not to publicly show his despise for Othello and Cassio so he uses Roderigo as the front man to take all the hits. When Roderigo doubts one of Iago’s ideas, Iago simply tells him more lies to anger him. Roderigo attacked Cassio out of jealousy because he believes that Desdemona is in love with Cassio, an idea imbedded in his head by the one and only manipulative Iago.


  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Iago uses people to get revenge upon Othello and Cassio, and manipulates them into believing lies, and allows them to take the fall for actions that are really Iago’s.




Proposal Paper
Rebuttal progression:


1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose…


Many think that Iago is not manipulating Roderigo, for Roderigo is doing all of his actions voluntarily.


2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]


We cannot deny that Roderigo isn’t being forced by Iago to commit these actions.



3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer…


However, Iago is filling Roderigo’s mind with lies and deception. Even though it was Roderigo that fought Cassio, Iago planted an idea of hatred in Roderigo’s mind and Iago told Roderigo to fight Cassio. Iago also got Cassio drunk in order to destroy his sense of right and wrong. Roderigo is simply acting out of jealousy and hatred when he attacked Cassio. Those ideas were planted by Iago. Iago knows not to publicly show his despise for Othello and Cassio so he uses Roderigo as the front man to take all the hits. When Roderigo doubts one of Iago’s ideas, Iago simply tells him more lies to anger him. Roderigo attacked Cassio out of jealousy because he believes that Desdemona is in love with Cassio, an idea imbedded in his head by the one and only manipulative Roderigo.












Thursday, September 10, 2015

Redo Summary Response Outline Bully
By: Kayla Lampe



  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • The movie Bully directed by Lee Hirsch sheds light on how bullying affects one’s life.
  • According to the movie, people commit, or attempt suicide because they felt as though could no longer live through the relentless physical and emotional bullying. The movie shows how bullying can cause mental problems, such as self doubt.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Lee Hirsch clearly depicts how bullying can influence one’s decisions in life .
  • Only third person
  • Supporting ideas
    • no quotes
  • facts; no opinions
  • Explain ideas
  • Concise
  • Attribute ideas back to author
  • No plot
  • In your own words



Response:
  • Make an argument
  • take a position (correctly or incorrectly portrays)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully directed by Lee Hirsch correctly depicts how bullying may hinder one’s life because it can lead to suicide.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • As the film proceeds, many different stories are told of how suicide affects someone. One student, Ty, was eleven years old when he was pushed so far he chose to end his own life. Ty was bullied to the point where he felt he did not deserve to live any longer.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Another boy, Alex, was interviewed in the film and stated, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Alex told this to his mom because he had been bullied for so long, he felt like he became immune to the bullying.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
    • Set-up
      • However, not all people that are bullied commit suicide. Parents report bullying to principals, school boards, and teachers in a hope to put an end to it, but they are told that bullying is just another thing that happens and is a part of every child’s life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Kelby is a teenager who gets bullied for being gay.When her dad was talking about how the staff at school respond to the bullying, he made the comment, “They all put on that plastic smile and say, ‘I will see what I can do’,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s parents confronted the school principal and the principal acted like everything was okay and no harm was being done. Many people will say they will take care of it just to get you off their back, but they have no intention of fixing the problem.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?(Rebuttal)
    • Some people, such as fearful adults, would claim that bullying is just another thing that happens, and that it doesn’t do major damage. This position seems reasonable because someone might not attempt suicide because of mental and physical damage based on how they handle being bullied, but it’s more complicated than that. Everyone who is a victim of bullying will be damage in some shape, way, or form. Often, students do not communicate their feelings and express their emotions through self-harm and suicide. Even when a kid does not physically show their pain, they are hurt on the inside. People need love to thrive and when they do not receive love they are bound to be hurt. Alex was a boy who was bullied in the film and he said, “I’m starting to think I don’t feel anything anymore” (Hirsch). His emotions have been toyed with and he would prefer to lose all emotion than to feel the hurt that these kids cause him to have.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Overall, self-harm is a common result to bullying and one’s life is often damaged when bullying takes place. The film Bully showed us this in the ways that everyone who was a victim of bullying was changed and hurt.