Thursday, September 10, 2015

Redo Summary Response Outline Bully
By: Kayla Lampe



  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • The movie Bully directed by Lee Hirsch sheds light on how bullying affects one’s life.
  • According to the movie, people commit, or attempt suicide because they felt as though could no longer live through the relentless physical and emotional bullying. The movie shows how bullying can cause mental problems, such as self doubt.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Lee Hirsch clearly depicts how bullying can influence one’s decisions in life .
  • Only third person
  • Supporting ideas
    • no quotes
  • facts; no opinions
  • Explain ideas
  • Concise
  • Attribute ideas back to author
  • No plot
  • In your own words



Response:
  • Make an argument
  • take a position (correctly or incorrectly portrays)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully directed by Lee Hirsch correctly depicts how bullying may hinder one’s life because it can lead to suicide.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • As the film proceeds, many different stories are told of how suicide affects someone. One student, Ty, was eleven years old when he was pushed so far he chose to end his own life. Ty was bullied to the point where he felt he did not deserve to live any longer.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Another boy, Alex, was interviewed in the film and stated, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Alex told this to his mom because he had been bullied for so long, he felt like he became immune to the bullying.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
    • Set-up
      • However, not all people that are bullied commit suicide. Parents report bullying to principals, school boards, and teachers in a hope to put an end to it, but they are told that bullying is just another thing that happens and is a part of every child’s life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Kelby is a teenager who gets bullied for being gay.When her dad was talking about how the staff at school respond to the bullying, he made the comment, “They all put on that plastic smile and say, ‘I will see what I can do’,” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s parents confronted the school principal and the principal acted like everything was okay and no harm was being done. Many people will say they will take care of it just to get you off their back, but they have no intention of fixing the problem.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?(Rebuttal)
    • Some people, such as fearful adults, would claim that bullying is just another thing that happens, and that it doesn’t do major damage. This position seems reasonable because someone might not attempt suicide because of mental and physical damage based on how they handle being bullied, but it’s more complicated than that. Everyone who is a victim of bullying will be damage in some shape, way, or form. Often, students do not communicate their feelings and express their emotions through self-harm and suicide. Even when a kid does not physically show their pain, they are hurt on the inside. People need love to thrive and when they do not receive love they are bound to be hurt. Alex was a boy who was bullied in the film and he said, “I’m starting to think I don’t feel anything anymore” (Hirsch). His emotions have been toyed with and he would prefer to lose all emotion than to feel the hurt that these kids cause him to have.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Overall, self-harm is a common result to bullying and one’s life is often damaged when bullying takes place. The film Bully showed us this in the ways that everyone who was a victim of bullying was changed and hurt.



1 comment:

  1. Good work on your summary. Expand on your explanation of your claim explaining what the quote says but how it connects to your claim as well.

    Good rebuttal but make sure at the end it connects to the claim you are making.

    One sentence conclusion for your concluding sentence. Eliminate personal words.

    17/20

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