Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Summary Response Outline Bully
By: Rachel Kelley, Mikaila Kuhl, and Kayla Lampe


  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • The movie Bully directed by Lee Hirsch sheds light on how bullying affects one’s life.
  • According to the movie, people commit, or attempt suicide because they felt as though could no longer live through the relentless physical and emotional bullying. The movie shows how bullying can cause mental problems, such as self doubt.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Lee Hirsch clearly depicts how bullying can influence one’s decisions in life .
  • Only third person
  • Supporting ideas
    • no quotes
  • facts; no opinions
  • Explain ideas
  • Concise
  • Attribute ideas back to author
  • No plot
  • In your own words


Response:
  • Make an argument
  • take a position (correctly or incorrectly portrays)
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully directed by Lee Hirsch correctly depicts how bullying may hinder one’s life because it can lead to suicide.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • As the film proceeds, many different stories are told of how suicide affects someone. One student, Ty, was eleven years old when he was pushed so far he chose to end his own life. Ty was bullied to the point where he felt he did not deserve to live any longer.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Another boy, Alex, was interviewed in the film and stated, “I’m starting to think that I don’t feel anything anymore,” (Alex).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Alex told this to his mom because he had been bullied for so long, he felt like he became immune to the bullying.
  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
    • Set-up
      • However, not all people that are bullied commit suicide. Parents report bullying to principals, school boards, and teachers in a hope to put an end to it, but they are told that bullying is just another thing that happens and is a part of every child’s life.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • As said by Kelby’s parents, “They all put on that plastic smile and say, ‘I will see what I can do’,” (Kelby’s Dad).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s parents confronted the school principal and the principal acted like everything was okay and no harm was being done.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument?(Rebuttal)
    • Some people, such as fearful adults, would claim that bullying is just another thing that happens, and that it doesn’t do major damage. This position seems reasonable because someone might not attempt suicide because of mental and physical damage based on how they handle being bullied, but it’s more complicated than that. Most people that are victims of bullying do get damaged because the mental and physical abuse is too much to handle. Often, students do not communicate their feelings and express their emotions through self-harm and suicide.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Overall, self-harm is a common result to bullying and one’s life is often damaged when bullying takes place.


1 comment:

  1. Good clear summary.

    Good response work. Make sure to spend more time explaining your quotations so that you are not just explaining the quote but its connection to your claim and topic sentence. Cite quotes with author/ director (Hirsch). Do those two things with your counterclaim as well: expand on explanation and change citation. I think you might need more set-up for who Kelby is.

    Good start to your rebuttal, but it seems at the end as if there is more that needs to be said to hit your argument home. keep pusing your argument thinking "so what?"

    With your conclusion, come back to the film and director and argument.

    15/20

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